Saturday, October 17, 2009

Oliver Twist

They crawled under the sheets, their last night together, tired and worn out.
Her muscles ached, and the urge to give into the sand master was crushing.

Tomorrow she would leave, tonight was her last chance.
Her side, she laid torn between sleep and pleasure.

Sleep or feigned, she knew not. Yet his body snaked against her bosom and the fresh scent of soap lingered.

Eyes, but closed, senses awakened.
“Tisk, tisk” the second hand ticked, the morning inched closer, a choice unmade.

Sleepwalker bunged further, perhaps he too was torn between the two.

Then her hands came alive, and slowly her lips trace his silhouette, gradually the dance fledge

Locked and winded, he asked “do you want more?”

Oliver would have been delighted

17 comments:

  1. Funny, but I lost the meaning in some places.

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  2. Do forgive me, if i failed to carry the theme across properly,may i attempt to to explain.

    The persona on her last night, though tired and would perfer to sleep, still chooses to engage with her partner, who acts as though he would want nothing but to drift off into dreamland,at the same time makes himself available to possibilties, so much so that he wonders if his partner is up for more.
    The comparison to Oliver is simply for emphasis.

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  3. wow dis is gooooooooddd.......i like

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  4. :-) thanks Jude, hope to see u around more.

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  5. yeah ,just checking you out,think my first time here,cheers

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  6. True, i hope this is not going to be the last time Muyiwa. U r always welcome.

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  7. This is very good, completely clear from the first reading. I love the creativity and how you tied it to Oliver Twist, that last line brought a smile to my face. Beautiful writing really, well done!

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  8. Glad i didn't lose u, in my line of thought Myne, i was a little worried about that, thanks for the morale:-)

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  9. Interesting. Two random questions: Why were they "tired and worn out"? Is there any connection to slavery?

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  10. Gameli, upon second and third reading, i understand how you could relate it to slavery, but to answer you question, no. As to the reason why, they are tired, i can't cook up a good enough one, perhaps we can say they've both had a hectic day :-) thanks for your comment hopeto see you around more.

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  11. Nana Akwasi thanks, it's been a while, don't stay away too long.

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  12. blogaratti, glad you enjoyed it, i hopethis is not the last time i hear from you.

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  13. love it, always impressed with ur talent...

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  14. i remember!

    that was me asking the whether you wanted more!
    good question that turned out to be!

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  15. Ms Understood, u flatter :-), thanks

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